The darkest of rain
The darkest of rains
Come at night when you sleep
Pouring down like the tears
While little children weep
I perch on the window sill
Waiting,
Watching,
For the right moment to enter
Your dreams while you sleep
While you weep
Tucked snugly in your sheets
I wait longingly to enter
You
While you sleep
While you weep
I carry my bag
Tools and tricks of the trade
To be put to use where your body is laid
Watching,
Waiting
For the right moment to creep
In through your window
While you lay in your sleep
Silence
Do not make a peep
I reach into my bag
Lift my hand to your face
And plant my sleepy seed
Right into its place
ยฉJennifer David 2013/2014
(This is about the Sandman and sleepy seeds. Did I trick you into thinking it was something dark?)
Photo props http://weheartit.com/entry/31247674
Really wasn’t sure where that was going until the last line, but I love when poems do that!
Mission accomplished. I was trying to combine a bit of mystery writing into poetry. I don’t usually write ‘dark’ poetry so I hope some people didn’t shy away from reading given the tone I set.
Thanks for taking a moment to comment. I really appreciate it.
Jennifer
HA! Thought you were going dark and sinister there… Love it!
I loved writing this one.
Thanks for the comment!
Jennifer
Yes you did trick me! ๐
๐ It’s not nice to fool …. but YES! ๐
I have had an opportunity to visit your site. I love your work!
Thank you so much. That means a lot to me.
Have a great evening.
Jennifer
Love the flow and the imagery, got me reading faster till the end. Creepy good.
Thank you so much. I’ve never attempted something quite like this before. It was fun to write. I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Jennifer
It flowed very nicely… wasn’t sure of the ending, but you wrapped it up beautifully. ๐
Thanks Ray.
Actually, I anticipated that it was Mommy aka sandman!
Awww well, I tried. Good call!
Jennifer
Yes! I thought it was going to be NIGHTMARISH! The picture is HAUNTING! I love happy endings…I love your work!
Thank you so much. such kind and generous words.
I love happy ending too!
Jennifer
Lovely poem! I was thinking “dark and sinister” right up until the last line. Fantastic and fun “fake-out”! ๐
Thank you for stopping by my blog, and for the “like” on my recent post. I am happy you enjoyed it, and I appreciate your visit to my site. ๐
So many sites, so little time!
Yes I was going to say ‘I ‘punked’ you’ at the end but I think that saying is dated now. Gotta love Ahston Kutcher though!
Cheers,
Jennifer
Yes you did. Good work on that twist at the end. ๐
Thank you!
I like the Sandman idea. Have you seen the car commercial where the Sandman trips and dumps a bunch of sand on the sleeper and he has this amazing dream about racing his new car on NASCAR. (of course I don’t remember which car it is – so I guess it wasn’t that successful a commercial after all ๐ )
Hi Cathy,
I have not seen the commercial. I might have to You Tube it!
Cheers,
Jennifer
Glad it ended this way. Phew!
Me tooooo! ๐
This might be my favorite poem of yours so far. Love it.
Thank you Jack. Maybe it’s not proper to say but it’s mine too!
Cheers,
Jennifer
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sexy. Ahhh spring is in the air.
Thanks for commenting Jim. Are you ready for Pay Day Thursday next week?
I’m balanced on my heels,
found my center,
posed to spring,
coiled like lightening
boiling my cauldron,
preparing a witches spell,
feisty like a habit,
smiling like the Cheshire cat.
I’m ready. ๐
Wonderful..love surprises!
Glad you liked it.
I love surprises too, well as long as I know they are going to happen ๐
Jennifer
I wish the darkest of rains did come only while we sleep. Unfortunately they do not.
Hi Carl,
Wise words.
Cheers,
Jennifer
I confess I was fooled into considering it a tryst of another kind!
So happy to fool you, even though it isn’t nice of me ๐
You got me! The picture set me up. ๐
That was the plan….but really it’s just the sand man standing out side in the rain!
It’s interesting isn’t it how we can so easily be misled through a combination of words and imagery?
Thank you for taking the time to comment Sarah. I appreciate it.
Jennifer
You scared the beejeebers (what are beejeebers?) out of me! I really thought you had gone to the dark side you clever lady! I don’t know if I have the courage to write my final poem! it will be said to say goodbye to NaPoWriMo ! best wishes Geraldine ๐
Hi Geraldine,
I actually have not been participating in the NaPoWriMo competition. I found a love and passion for poetry around 5 days into my blogging when I posted my one and only poem that I wrote many year back. It’s such a new love for me. So I won’t be slowing down any time soon and I hope that you keep it up as well!
Yes what are beejeebers? They sound creepy though, so it’s fitting!
I was worried some of my readers may not read this given the look of it from the beginning.
No dark side for me…. yet? ๐
Have a wonderful day and thank you for your lovely post.
Jennifer
Yes, you did. I certainly did not guess the Sandman.
๐ Awesome. Mission accomplished ๐
You definitely had me thinking something unheard of happened to you. Making readers wonder and question… very good.
Thank you Adele.
And thank you for taking the time to comment.
Jennifer
You naughty, naughty girl. At first I thought some was comforted in pain, then you mentioned “seeds” and I thoughts slowly drifted. haha ๐
Muwhahaha (my naughty laugh)
I’m glad you enjoyed it.
Jennifer
I loved this poem, Jennifer. It made me think of my children…they are both under 5 yrs and I often watch them sleeping and wonder what they are dreaming about. X
Thank you.
As do all good Mothers… ๐
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This is really good, but shouldn’t it be “its” rather than “it’s” at the end?
Yes!! Thank you for pointing it out to me. I tend to rush and not pay attention. I will change it right now!
No worries, I think we’ve all made that mistake on more than one occasion!
I loved this! You totally fooled me until the end…great stuff!
ohhhhh that was scary …see you were right earlier when we talked about not seeing the meaning of a poem straight away ๐ that was really good Jennifer. I liked it a lot., C. x
Yep, I was tricked. Nice job, this was a fun poem.
I LUV THIS!!!!
That was beautiful. Maybe it is because I love the rain and the dark and dreams, but all I could see in the poem was a dreamweaver waiting to give a sad child a dream. Maybe it was because as I read it, I was already sweetly sad about something else. This poem touched me deeply. Thank you.
Beautiful words with beautiful imagery. Love how the rain is featured in a most heartfelt way. Touching!
I like this – it carried you right along and kept you in its grip. ๐
Yes, you did trick me, too, but great ending and loved the poem!
Lauren
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